In contrast to yesterday’s post, do you ever feel like you’re saying the same thing over and over again? Revisions are zipping right along but I’m discovering that I suffer from a disease.
It is called same-word-stuckness.
THE INBETWEEN is 81,655 words exactly. That’s a lot of words. But how many of those words are the same word used way too many times?
Like names. Probably 5,000 of those words are names. Too low? Maybe. Maybe 10,000. Get this: MS Word has this super-cool feature (possibly my favorite, which goes to show how lame MS Word really is) called AutoSummarize. It’s under the “tools” menu if you’re interested. Anyway, it summarizes your document according to its main theme. Apparently THE INBETWEEN’s main theme is:
Noah. Noah. Esmund.”
“Esmund.” “Noah —”
Shall we pause for a moment of silence? Stop laughing. Noah and Esmund are very important characters —
Then there are those other words. Take a look at mine:
Apparently Noah and Esmund have pretty equal screen-time judging by the size of their font, but they’ve been upstaged by none other than LIKE. Don’t worry, I don’t use it like teenagers do because that would be like really tedious to read. LIKE is a comparison word, remember, which means TI is peppered with all sorts of cool similes. Right.
Also popular are EYES. I love eyes. So do poets: “The eyes of men converse as much as their tongues, with the advantage that the ocular dialect needs no dictionary” (Ralph Waldo Emerson). TI is full of eye-conversations. Green eyes, silver-blue eyes, brown eyes all blabbing at each other —
Fortunately WANT, TIME, DEAD and KEY are big-ish. Good thing since all of the above are major themes. Also major themes: MOUTHS, HANDS, THROATS, LIPS, HOT. Yes, I categorize TI as urban fantasy, but I called it paranormal romance for a while…
And then — have you noticed how giant BACK is? If you have, forget about it. I’m not so sure what’s going on there. Also random is the appearance of TEETH. Enough said.
Finally, to prove that this is a YA novel written by a young adult herself: OKAY JUST MAYBE SOMETHING can prove that TI is not JUST a random jumble of overused words but LIKE something GOOD.
We shall see.