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Teaser Tuesday

Drumroll, please.

Here is the much anticipated, completely unedited, possibly horrible opening to FELL.

I see him again on the northbound 17 express: rush hour traffic and nowhere to sit, rain spattering the windshield, and that boy standing in the aisle ahead of me, pretending to read Steinbeck like yesterday but never actually flipping the page.

And it scares me. The day before yesterday, he was just another passenger. Yesterday he was cute, and once I stared back when I caught him looking, fluttered my eyelashes and smiled like a fool. Today, he is terrifying. I don’t know why. I zip my raincoat, five dollars at Goodwill, up to my chin.

He doesn’t normally ride the metro bus. I pick that up right away. Number one, he doesn’t have a bus pass. Number two, he always tries to pay as he enters, even during peak hour when everyone knows to pay on the way out. Number three, he can’t keep his balance.

We stop on Market street. Almost half the bus floods out into the February rain. Shoes squeak, umbrellas pop. I squish to the side of the aisle, half leaning on some poor old lady with a million shopping bags as a bunch of people push past. The second I move, the boy pops out of his Steinbeck. He pretends to drift his gaze toward the side window, toward Ballard blurred by downpour and headlights, but his eyes flick to me. Just once. My heart sends electric shocks through my chest — oh gosh this kid is weird. His eyes are brown, brown to match his hair, which is swoopy and kind of emo. He doesn’t break the stare, and that’s the fourth reason I know Steinbeck’s not used to metro buses. Metro buses have rules: only look people in the eye if you want trouble. Steinbeck is trouble. I feel it in a tingling in the tips of my fingers and a crawling across the back of my neck.

I grip my umbrella, seventy-five cents at Goodwill, ready to use it.

The bus jerks forward and everyone shifts, grabs handholds, sits down. Windshield wipers swish faster as we move into the rain. Like magnets my eyes snap back to Steinbeck. Is he watching my reflection in the window? Or only watching the flickers of night between the reflection of my raincoat and the reflection of the passenger behind me?

Birch, I tell myself, shivering, stop being stupid.

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Teaser Tuesday

The next installment of The Thrill Seekers, pasted below, is a classic example of the revision process. It used to be one of “my darlings” (aka one of my favorite scenes EVER because the dialogue between Patricia and Reed made me dizzy with delight every time I read it). But, out of necessity, I had to kill my darling in the third or fourth round of revision. Ouch. It still makes me sad – but it had to be done.

Have you had to do that before? Cut a beautiful scene that you just love out of necessity?I think there are a few reasons to kill a darling:

  • it’s a really fun scene but completely unnecessary to the overall plot
  • it’s a really fun scene but doesn’t fit with the revised plot

Any other reasons? Feel free to expand in the comments. The darling that used to be this scene fits with #2: in the original version, Trish and Reed were discussing why Patricia liked Ben – but in the revised version, Patricia doesn’t actually like Ben, and never has – for reasons which will be discovered…

[Teaser snipped; thanks for the comments!]

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Teaser Tuesday

Yeah, yeah, I know it’s Wednesday. But Teaser Wednesday just doesn’t have the same ring as Teaser Tuesday. Last week’s snippet ended with Reed half-quoting TS Eliot’s The Hollow Men: “Whatever. We’ll just go out with a whimper.”

[Teaser snipped; thanks for the comments!]

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Teaser Tuesday

TwO dAyS uNtIl ChRiStMaS bReAk! Zero finals down, three to go…

Search the tags for links to previous Thrill Seekers chapters. In this chapter, (called “Consensus: Forking the Lawn is Lame”) Patricia goes back to explain a couple things. Ready, go.

[Teaser snipped; thanks for the comments!]

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Teaser Tuesday

One thing first: the Christmas season is delightful but it comes hand-in-hand with these things called finals. In other words, I might not be around much. I will try my hardest to post on an every-other-day status (or something close) for the next two weeks. Once we hit Christmas break, this place will be up and running again — look for a January interview series with some quite astonishing interviewees.

Some of you got hooked on THE THRILL SEEKERS last week, so here’s some more — picking up right where we left off. Ben, Patricia, and Reed are fraternizing with the enemy — aka Jake’s criminal uncle. Don’t try this at home.

[Teaser snipped; thanks for the comments!]

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Teaser Tuesday

Time for Teaser Tuesday! It’s been a week or so since I’ve posted a THRILL SEEKERS chapter, so if you need a refresher, click here for chapter one and here for chapter two.

This is part of chapter three, which is called Stealing for Dummies 101.

[Teaser snipped; thanks for the comments!]

Tomorrow: I’m jumping on the highway, aka adding YA Highway‘s Roadtrip Wednesday to the blog’s weekly calender.

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Teaser Tuesday: The Thrill Seekers

Remember THE THRILL SEEKERS from last week? Here’s chapter two (entitled Waffles and Plotting).

tuscany

Patricia, Reed and Ben are off to Italy! (almost)

[Teaser snipped]

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